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(reads shirou's description then checks the circles other works)
yeaaaah.......it all makes sense now -___-
amiboy
wish she woulda gotten with her cousin. Im sad now =,(
Just seeing the thumbnails I can asure that Shirou's description was EXCESSIVELY kind to that gurl...
Calling her retarded is you being a saint.
just a few pages in i knew something is not right.
- a kid wouldn't normally think that much, excessive thought inputs.
- introduction of onee san totally throws immersion out of the fucking window - what do you mean a male kid around 8-10 years old, knows what tomboy and feminity is??? (protagonist could have just know onee san's family name or something for realism as well, not her first name, things like these are basic writing really)
- awkward smile from onee san after she protected protagonist for the first time in this work.
The download dont works. It fails directly. Others work fine.
Stxlienad
all in all still kinda solid

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